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FlatLander's avatar

I prefer your 'second' versions. If you start writing like those you could be approaching writing like Dan Jenkins or Herbert Warren Wind. They had a way of pulling you in and making you feel like you were there.

Clay Horning's avatar

Thanks so much.

My biggest inspiration for that is Peter Gammons, who would launch into his pieces, spoken and written, from a moment. No set up at all. I don’t know that i did it exactly here in my examples, but i call it starting in the middle. What needs to be set up can be filtered in as you go.